Left Wanting

Trying, yet again, to break the code of the erasure form. All month, I’ve been wanting to take the source text and create a poem that is about something else entirely, to use the source text for words, not ideas. I haven’t been able to do it at all. That’s why all these poems feel like summaries rather than something that’s new, something that’s mine. I like some of them, sure. A few I even like a lot, but they still feel like cheating, as if I haven’t actually broken through to the real idea of the form.

Tonight’s poem steps away from the meaning of the source text, the subject matter of the source text … but it’s empty, doesn’t meant anything, doesn’t say anything, isn’t about anything at all, has no real emotion. Sigh.

Am I happy May is right around the corner? You bet.

(An erasure of a Times review of it’s reporting on AIDS and gay issues.)

The story would turn out to be
tragically wrong, disorienting,
The unknown dawned far worse.
An invitation.
The idea was easy to challenge.
People, deeply unsure,
certain to risk everything.
The idea was unavoidably personal,
the path to comfort paved
by pride, worry, crisis,
and longstanding conflict,
decided quietly.

It’s National Poetry Month! Every year, I choose a specific form and try to write a poem a day in that form. This year, I am trying erasure poems and I want to use news articles as my source texts. I’ve practiced a few times, and it’s already feeling difficult! We’ll see how it goes.

Here’s an edited version of the Wiki definition of this form:
Erasure Poetry: a form of found poetry created by erasing words from an existing text in prose or verse and framing the result on the page as a poem. Erasure is a way to give an existing piece of writing a new set of meanings, questions, or suggestions. It lessens the trace of authorship but requires purposeful decision making. What does one want done to the original text? Does a gesture celebrate, denigrate, subvert, or efface the source completely? One can erase intuitively by focusing on musical and thematic elements or systematically by following a specific process regardless of the outcome.
Also, Robert Lee Brewer at Writer’s Digest has some good points to add about ethics and plagiarism:
Quick note on ethics: There is a line to be drawn between erasure poems and plagiarism. If you’re not erasing more than 50% of the text, then I’d argue you’re not making enough critical decisions to create a new piece of art. Further, it’s always good form to credit the original source for your erasures.

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2 thoughts on “Left Wanting

  1. Oh, I didn’t know that’s what you were trying to do with your poems. I think you have been successful in doing this, though: “Erasure is a way to give an existing piece of writing a new set of meanings, questions, or suggestions”

    Sure, your poems usually served as commentary on the stories presented, but most poetry serves as commentary on things we experience or observe anyway, right? Basically, I think you’re being too hard on yourself, though at least now I understand why.


    1. Thanks, Akilah. When it comes to poetry, I am usually pretty hard on myself. And really rigid in my interpretation of what the form is “supposed” to be. I need to remember that early in my process so I can lighten up!


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